This is my post for Flash Fiction Friday. Join in here: http://madisonwoods.wordpress.com/2012/04/18/photo-prompt-for-the-friday-fictioneers-100-words-join-us-friday/
Water!
Where does it come from?
I’ve built my nest here my whole life!
This is ancient tribal nesting grounds!
This water doesn’t belong.
She was almost mine!
Her admiration of my bright yellow visage and striking red wing feathers was obvious.
I’m a mighty hunter of spiders, and provider of berries.
None better!
She left though.
Accepted that dull feathered fool.
Just because he built in a hollow!
Branches were good enough for my ancestors.
Where’d the water come from?
This is a desert! No water!
How was I supposed to know?
Next year I get a hollow!
Water!
Creating Reality and Living Life 
This was really good, the indignant protestations of the Verdin (which I had to google incidentally – I love the way I learn new things on these prompts. The voice was exceptionally good, very convincing. Really well done. Have I told you I love your cat, by the way?
Verdins are such pretty proud birds and very Sparrow -like in their behaviors. I love to watch them
Dear Amanda,
A perfect tale, unique and original, bookended by Water! Well done.
Aloha,
Doug
Thank you so much this was fun
The narrator, the Verdin, is so forceful in his speech, perhaps to reflect the indignation and unfairness of losing his love to that dull feathered fool, just because he built in a hollow! LIfe is so unfair and I could not help laughing at the humour. I find it so refreshing that your characters are birds, speaking at us humans of the absurdities and unfairness of life. This is great, Doug.
Here is mine: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/04/20/fridayfictioneers-diamond-tear-drops/
Thank you the pic reminded me of a nest I found after a flood in El Paso Tx. I could just imagine the indignant shock of the bird.
The water be damned!
Ruining the best laid plans….
Nice tone from the verdin haha.
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Brilliant. I could just picture him. Very indignant and rightly so.
Here’s mine
http://tollykitsjourney.wordpress.com/2012/04/20/flash-fiction-story-2-for-fridayfictioneers-flashfiction/
Your tone and voice are perfect! I could absolutely feel the indignation of the bird and his frustration. well done!
I’m over here: http://elmowrites.wordpress.com/2012/04/20/friday-fiction-maturity/
Thank you!
A light-hearted tone throughout, despite the harsh result for the poor bird. I liked how the first “water!” denotes a sense of wonder and puzzlement, whereas the second usage somehow becomes a cry of rage and frustration. Nice.
My link is this-a-way:
http://garybaileywriting.wordpress.com/2012/04/20/fridayfictioneers-death-and-life/
Thank you! It is exactly what I wanted.
Lol. I imagine a bird thinking this way. Frantic, urgent, angry when agitated. Nice work on this.
My attempt: http://unduecreativity.wordpress.com/2012/04/20/water-the-earth/
Like Sandra…not until I googled Verdin, did I understand your delightful piece. I also love learning new things from these prompts and other writers. NIce work. Here’s mine:
http://www.triplemoonstar.blogspot.com
Love it! Food and pulchritude were no match for shelter and security.
Here’s my story: http://wp.me/p24aJS-3Z
In the end it is what matters
Such a clever story. I found myself just as confused and indignant at the little bird. Poor guy. Life as a bird came through amazingly clear in this. Great share.
Here’s mine:http://remakingme-atiyatownes.blogspot.com/2012/04/friday-flash-fiction-goo.html
Thank you! I could just see him glaring at that drop of water.
Great tale and so original. The voice was perfect, good work.
Thank you! I had no idea what to write until 4am
I appreciate the POV from the verdin. Very creative and effective. Great story! Thanks for stopping by and reading my attempt
Thank you for the return!
Love the POV of the intrepid bird, looking to impress a mate. Those fickle females.
Here’s mine:http://teschoenborn.com/2012/04/20/friday-fictioneer-5/
Hehehe aren’t we?
I love how the chant of the word water is like a bird’s call! Very funny!
Here is mine!
http://susielindau.com/2012/04/20/what-the-150-word-flash-fiction/
Haha! I could totally see a bird thinking like how you portrayed it in your story. Wonderful take on this beautiful prompt.
Here’s mine at: http://the-drabbler.com/splat/
Thank you I will visit as soon as I am finished editing!
That’s exactly how I imagine birds think. Their arrogance and quick little thoughts come through in your writing. I liked this a lot.
Thanks I really enjoyed yours!
Hello,
I thought the Vermin got caught that’s why he’s surprised with his habitat. But when I googled the nature of the bird, that’s when I understood it better and even got it’s humor at the end. Better to get a hollow next time. I like it.
Thanks for your visit at my site.
Allen
You captured the voice of little bird perfectly. I enjoyed it!